Friday, 16 June 2017

THE MISTAKE





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THE MISTAKE

Just one more drink.  He smiled at me, a leering grin that turned my stomach. I was with him now.  I’d said the words yesterday at the Registry Office, pledged myself to him.  Now we were on honeymoon.  Now I regretted my decision.  He was already showing his true nature.  My phone had gone missing.  I was never alone.  He waited outside the bathroom door.  He waited until I was asleep before he did what he needed to do.   The man at the table opposite kept looking at us.  Any minute now his temper would rise.  Any minute now. 
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10 comments:

  1. Keith's Ramblings16 June 2017 at 05:54

    I could feel the tension rising. Run!

    My story is called 'Someone'

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  2. Janie Junebug16 June 2017 at 14:20

    That's frightening. It says a lot for one short paragraph.

    Love,
    Janie

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  3. Unknown17 June 2017 at 12:12

    You've done a good job of building hopelessness into this scene. Almost makes one wish the man at the other table would keep staring, her husband would start a fight, and the other guy would take him out for good.

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  4. Unknown18 June 2017 at 12:21

    I had a boyfriend like that. I feel her pain. Well done.

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    1. Unknown18 June 2017 at 12:21

      That comment is really by Alicia Jamtaas but I couldn't get my identity to come up in the list.

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  5. brudberg18 June 2017 at 12:52

    Yik... so sad to find out when it's already too late.

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  6. Unknown18 June 2017 at 15:43

    Run, girl, run!

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  7. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields19 June 2017 at 05:18

    Dear Sally,

    I hope she can get away from him and have the marriage annulled before it's too late. Creepy. Frightening. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. Wendy19 June 2017 at 11:28

    What a time to wise up!

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  9. Dale20 June 2017 at 09:22

    He must have shown some of his true self at some point in time... Poor fool. She has to get out of there and fast!

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