100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups – Week#51
The prompt this week is another simple one:
…. the line was drawn ….
As always you have an additional 100 words to add to these 4 making 104 in total. The prompt must not be split and should be suitable for a PG certificate. Please visit and comment on others as it is this shared support that brings out the best in us. Do read ‘What is 100WCGU?’ If you are completely confused or leave a comment below!
THE FIELD
Looking over the hill he could clearly see the line was drawn
Wavering over and gliding through the growing green and gold corn
Two lines marking the way forever set parallel to each other
At the edge of the field in the distance lurks menacing dark cloud cover
Emerging through a patch of brilliant sunlight appears a flock of birds
Who swoop in and out of the flashes of light, soaring ever upwards
The farmer removes his cloth cap and tips his bald head back in reflection
Has he done enough through the hard years to ensure the future of his children?
Word count: 104
What a great use of the prompt..you have a lovely way with words. Farming isn't half as romantic as some think .
ReplyDeleteI love how you described all of his hard work as being for his family's future.
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you ended this piece and I could picture it perfectly in my mind.
ReplyDeleteI love this; even without the picture, your images are bright and clean. Nicely done. :)
ReplyDeleteVery evacuative. I love the way the lines, forever parallel become the symbol of the hard work.
ReplyDeleteEvocative. I hate the automatic spell check!
Deletebrilliant :) such visualisation with your words- love it i hope he has! x
ReplyDeleteLove the description and the emotion.
ReplyDeleteSally, very evocative as is all of your work i've read so far. I was drawn into your poem thinking about what a beautiful image the birds made, then the different perspective of the farmer. Well crafted. D
ReplyDeleteAnd I wonder where the image came from? If you're not sure, read my blog post today. It's all about using images - legally or illegally. Scary stuff. D
ReplyDeleteCor blimey! There will have to be a lot of uninteresting posts from now on with only text or blurry, out of focus cameras from an unprofessional photographer.
DeleteThe image really helps the reader conceptualize the story. Nicely don. I often wonder the same thing about my kids too.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful words and photo Sally!
ReplyDeleteAmazingly colorful and descriptive! Outstanding work!
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