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Mondays Finish the Story – Sept. 7th, 2015
Welcome to
Mondays Finish the Story!
This
is a unique flash fiction challenge where we provide you with a new photo each
week, and the first sentence of a story. Your challenge is to finish the
story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided. Don’t forget to use the opening
sentence… This
challenge runs from Monday to Sunday! Get creative and have fun finishing the
story!
This week’s challenge photo
comes to us from Marcy B. Ayanian along with the opening line. Thank you
Marcy!
Please feel free to upload your story by clicking on the link above to find the little
blue frog below to add your story to the list!
Finish the story begins
with: “As her mount shifted uneasily
under her, she grasped the brim of her old felt Stetson, gazed upwards and
remembered Jean Pierre.”
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| Photo credit: Mary B. Ayanian
GAY PARIS
"As her mount shifted uneasily under her, she grasped the brim
of her old felt Stetson, gazed upwards and remembered Jean Pierre.”
Caroline patted Beauty’s neck as
they stopped for a breather on the ridge.
Her mobile vibrated in her jacket pocket. Damping down feelings of resentment of being
bothered she looked at the phone, it disclosed a beautiful picture of the Eiffel
Tower stretching up to the sky.
Those days with Jean Pierre were over but not lost. He texted her every day, sometimes she was in
bed while his day had just begun, sometimes she replied when she knew he was
partaking of his petit déjeuner. She could
almost smell the strong coffee, black as night, offset by the sweet brioche and
croissant crumbs all over the tablecloth. If only her father hadn't suffered a
stroke and needed her to run the ranch she would still be in gay Paris.
Shelving her
romantic dreams for another day Caroline spurred Beauty back to the ranch and another
full work day ahead.
Word count: 150
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I like it. A complete story in few words. Hopefully, these two can make something work in the future.
ReplyDeleteThat's too bad she was needed at home and had to leave her lover but at least he texts her everyday so the love affair is still on-going. Great story Sally!
ReplyDeleteI love a story that includes dear Paris! I have only to see the Eiffel's image to trigger many fond memories. You manage to tell us a lot in this short work: where she is, where he is, why she isn't with him and why he's still on her mind. Well done as always! This would work well in a longer piece. . .
ReplyDeleteThis was very well done Sally. I truly enjoyed this story. Thank you for participating in the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well... ^..^
ReplyDeleteI wonder if they'll ever meet again? I'm thinking Jean Pierre might suddenly turn up at her ranch one day...
ReplyDeleteNice story :-)
Here is someone with a real Paris experience! :) Nice story.
ReplyDeleteI can see this story turning into a movie.
ReplyDeleteHi Sally. I saw Paris and came running. What a lovely scenario. As other commenters have said, this could lead to something bigger. Kudos to you!
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