Wednesday, 12 June 2013


100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups – Week#93
Posted on June 10, 2013 by jfb57

…when the judgement came it…
You have the usual 100 words to add to those above to produce a creative piece to link here and share. The link will close on 17th June
If you are new to this weekly challenge, have a read of ‘What is 100WCGU?.

 The days were long, the wait was even longer
She hoped she would feel stronger
Weighing up all the pros and cons
Thoughts snaking around like pythons
Writhing and wrestling each other out of the way
Little or no sleep, trying to get through the day
Talked of nothing else, nothing made sense
There could be no more pretence
They grouped together, huddled in the corner
Batting at her mind, strafing with anger
So when the judgement came it was with some relief
Her emotions overflowed, she let out her grief
A primordial scream cut across her brain
She would never go through that again.

Word count: 105


  1. Ah, I know this feeling and that sense of relief. Well done! I especially like "cut across her brain"—really nice. :)

  2. Sally I love this piece. Waiting can be a very painful experience and I think you've really caught the essence of that deep feeling in this piece.

  3. On pins and needles. I enjoyed the suspenseful write.

  4. Waiting is the worst part of any event or ordeal. You've captured the agony perfectly.

  5. Very suspenseful!! I absolutely hate waiting. It is so hard to have patience. You captured the feelings beautifully.


  6. What is it about the word "primordial" that evokes such an emotional response?