100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups – Week #53
The prompt is:-
… would seven prove to be too much? …..
As usual, you have 100 words to add to these 7 making 107 in total to produce your piece. Please make sure it is suitable for a PG certificate and do go and visit each others to support each other.
The link will stay open until 13th August.
Here is my contribution:
PIGGY BANK
Her family has gone out so now was her last chance to count
Dashing up to her bedroom she shut the door anticipation mounting
Tipping the pink piggy bank upside down she struggled with the black stopper
Finally it came loose; she shook the coins out on to her bed, silver and copper
It’s taken several months for her to attain this goal, it wasn’t achieved lightly
Yelping with delight, she counts again and again, pounds, shillings and a few pennies
Would seven prove to be too much to stop those horrible school bullies?
Word count: 107 – 109 with title
HA -- I didn't see that ending coming.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Wendy. Great surprise ending!
ReplyDeleteMy excitement was building all through that wondering what she'd been saving up for. Really sobering last line - didn't see it coming at all.
ReplyDeleteYou really got me at the end! Great twist and heart breaking.
ReplyDeleteYes, sobering is the word - and unfortunately an all too common experience. Good job.
ReplyDeleteoh no what an ending! theirs me thinking she wanted to buy something! good work x
ReplyDeleteOoh, that way lies further heartbreak. Interesting reaction to the prompt.
ReplyDeleteAww.. The build up had me getting excited for her and then I got to the end... So sad, and makes me think of how the bullies get everywhere now with most kids being online... Very Original take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteWhat a fab ending x
ReplyDeleteHow very sad,poor child. You've tugged at my heart!
ReplyDeleteVery sad and sadly so real, great take on the prompt
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