Tuesday, 16 June 2015

BOYS - Monday's Finish The Story

Mondays Finish the Story – June 15th, 2015

Welcome to Mondays Finish the Story!

This is a unique flash fiction challenge where we provide you with a new photo each week, and the first sentence of a story. Your challenge is to finish the story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided. Don’t forget to use the opening sentence… This challenge runs from Monday to Sunday! Get creative and have fun finishing the story!

Please include the photo with your bit of flash and a link back to this post. Do not forget to click on the blue frog and add your link so that others can enjoy your story too! Now let’s have some fun!

This week, thanks go out to Eric Wickland of Momusnews who came up with the opening line to go with this week’s photo!

© 2015, Barbara W. Beacham

Finish the story begins with:  “At first, it looked like an ordinary marble, but it was far from it.”


  “At first, it looked like an ordinary marble, but it was far from it.”

Sean and Charlie scrabbled down the hillside, scraping their knees and scuffing their shoes, little thought as to what their mums would say when they got home.  They were ten year old boys out on an adventure.

The weather was cool for the month of June but the boys hadn't bothered to wear a coat, they were tough, young and immortal.  No harm could befall them, no danger for them to be aware of; they were just out and about having fun. 

The shiny round sphere had taken their eye and that’s why they were plummeting down the banks of the grassy knoll.  Excitement shone from their eyes as they both grabbed for the ball at the same time. 

The sudden explosion rent the sphere apart, shattering it into millions of pieces, disappointment led to words their parents would never want to hear from their mouths.

Word count: 146



  1. Darn word count! I hope there is a part 2 opportunity so I can learn what it was.

  2. Bad little boys using those words parents use but don't want to hear from their offspring! Lovely descriptive tale! And a whole other take on an unusual prompt. Love it, you always surprise Sally!

  3. Boys will be boys!! Great story!

  4. A wonderful weaving of a really good story. I enjoyed this! I could picture those boys in my mind, which is a sign of a story well written. Thank you for writing again for the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well... ^..^

  5. Great description of the way boys out on an adventure feel! I hope nothing has been unleashed...

  6. A very creative take on the picture, and I wonder if they unintentionally unleashed something good or bad?

  7. Love the last line! Great belly laugh!

  8. Oh, that's terrible! The boys adventure blew up in smoke!