Friday 10 April 2015

THE JOURNEY










https://rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com/2015/04/08/10-april-2015/

Friday Fictioneers

photo prompt followed by 100 words



PHOTO PROMPT – © Jennifer Pendergast


THE  JOURNEY

The land was barren, the days long, a short stop to take on water for the engine, a chance to stretch my legs.  The rusty wheels, oxide coloured metal, silenced now from the grinding, rhythmic chugging as the train devoured the miles.  

My new life beckoned, coming ever closer, it was too late to change my mind, the wheels had been set in motion when I answered the letter.  The carriages were bearing me towards my fate along with the cattle and various ranch hands that would help my new husband-to-be make his fortune. His dreams were now my dreams.

Word count: 100

8 comments:

  1. Very nice. I felt the movement of the train and the hope of a new beginning.

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  2. Nothing like a new start in life. Good luck to her.

    Your writing well describes the scene and conveys the situation perfectly.

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  3. A sense of inevitability. Nicely done.

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  4. Dear Sally,

    I hope she's not in for disappointment. Nicely written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  5. Lots of questions Sally and some answers, but the moment of change has left the reader wanting more. I liked the Flash Fiction and yet there is plenty of scope for a longer story too.

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  6. Thanks for the support Sally! - It's nice to be back! :-)

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  7. I can imagine her sitting there with a mixture of excitement and trepidation. Reminds me of going off to university!
    Nicely written story.

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  8. Thanks for visiting my blog and your comment :) Wow, this was a great story. I was there with her on her journey!

    betty

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