Tuesday, 8 September 2015



Mondays Finish the Story – Sept. 7th, 2015

Welcome to Mondays Finish the Story!

This is a unique flash fiction challenge where we provide you with a new photo each week, and the first sentence of a story. Your challenge is to finish the story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided. Don’t forget to use the opening sentence… This challenge runs from Monday to Sunday! Get creative and have fun finishing the story!

This week’s challenge photo comes to us from Marcy B. Ayanian along with the opening line.  Thank you Marcy!

Please feel free to upload your story by clicking on the link above to find the little blue frog below to add your story to the list!

Finish the story begins with:  “As her mount shifted uneasily under her, she grasped the brim of her old felt Stetson, gazed upwards and remembered Jean Pierre.”

Photo credit: Mary B. Ayanian


"As her mount shifted uneasily under her, she grasped the brim of her old felt Stetson, gazed upwards and remembered Jean Pierre.

Caroline patted Beauty’s neck as they stopped for a breather on the ridge.  Her mobile vibrated in her jacket pocket.  Damping down feelings of resentment of being bothered she looked at the phone, it disclosed a beautiful picture of the Eiffel Tower stretching up to the sky.

Those days with Jean Pierre were over but not lost.  He texted her every day, sometimes she was in bed while his day had just begun, sometimes she replied when she knew he was partaking of his petit déjeuner.  She could almost smell the strong coffee, black as night, offset by the sweet brioche and croissant crumbs all over the tablecloth. If only her father hadn't suffered a stroke and needed her to run the ranch she would still be in gay Paris.

Shelving her romantic dreams for another day Caroline spurred Beauty back to the ranch and another full work day ahead.

Word count: 150


  1. I like it. A complete story in few words. Hopefully, these two can make something work in the future.

  2. That's too bad she was needed at home and had to leave her lover but at least he texts her everyday so the love affair is still on-going. Great story Sally!

  3. I love a story that includes dear Paris! I have only to see the Eiffel's image to trigger many fond memories. You manage to tell us a lot in this short work: where she is, where he is, why she isn't with him and why he's still on her mind. Well done as always! This would work well in a longer piece. . .

  4. This was very well done Sally. I truly enjoyed this story. Thank you for participating in the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well... ^..^

  5. I wonder if they'll ever meet again? I'm thinking Jean Pierre might suddenly turn up at her ranch one day...
    Nice story :-)

  6. Here is someone with a real Paris experience! :) Nice story.

  7. I can see this story turning into a movie.

  8. Hi Sally. I saw Paris and came running. What a lovely scenario. As other commenters have said, this could lead to something bigger. Kudos to you!