Monday, 1 April 2013

A - Z April 2013

AMBER
(Daughter of Carol and Graham)
Amber wandered down the street
Her head down scuffing her feet
She’d be 15 years old in a couple of weeks
Perhaps she’d colour her hair in blue streaks
That would cause some consternation
It wouldn’t be civilised conversation
She’d have to wait till Granddad was round for his supper
He could take her side and calm her parents’ anger
She was getting good grades at school, she liked learning
She could cope with being a nerd and shrugged off the bullying
Her home came in to view, as she put her key in the lock
Opening the door, she stopped for a moment and took stock
She stepped on to the black and white tiles of the hallway
Breathing in the smells of her home and the love it conveys
She ran lightly up the stairs to her bedroom booting up her computer
Flopping down on her bed she flipped open her mobile and pressed answer.
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28 comments:

  1. Catherine Noble1 April 2013 at 03:32

    Nicely painted picture of the family dynamics, Sally. The wee granddad sounds lovely :)

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  2. Dani1 April 2013 at 03:46

    Oh this is cute! I really love how it flows and says so much!

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  3. Denise Covey 1 April 2013 at 05:09

    I love the realistic atmosphere Sally. Good start.

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  4. Elise Fallson1 April 2013 at 05:20

    Nicely written, I thought you captured the setting and the everyday life of this teenager very well. (:

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  5. Dena1 April 2013 at 05:59

    Wonderful, I loved reading it!

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  6. Dana1 April 2013 at 06:06

    I agree: you've captured this teenager perfectly! I'm glad you're doing the A to Z, too. Looking forward to reading more. ☺

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  7. Unknown1 April 2013 at 06:32

    Great insight to the teen brain. I think she should go for the blue hair!
    Jenn @Scribbles From Jenn

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  8. Mark Means1 April 2013 at 06:36

    Nicely done and I thought it really flowed well! You have a very interesting theme :)

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  9. Carrie Sorensen1 April 2013 at 06:47

    What a strong minded girl. :) Great portrayal, and in verse!

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  10. Francene Stanley1 April 2013 at 07:04

    Interesting way to talk about a letter in the alphabet. Bloggers are a clever group.

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  11. triles1 April 2013 at 07:14

    Amber seems like a cool kid. Great start to the Challenge.

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  12. Jen1 April 2013 at 08:10

    Very real Sally and very nicely done!

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  13. Unknown1 April 2013 at 08:15

    Nicely done! And I love the village folklore theme.

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  14. Yolanda Renée1 April 2013 at 08:31

    Excellent read, looking forward to more!

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  15. Ellen Brickley1 April 2013 at 08:43

    Interesting start, Sally, looking forward to reading on!

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  16. kjmckendry1 April 2013 at 09:29

    Blue streaks...you captured the essence of a teen well.

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  17. Michael Di Gesu1 April 2013 at 11:07

    Hi , Sally,

    Nicely done! LOVE the name Amber. I chose the same for my 11 year cold mc in my first novel.

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  18. Nick Wilford1 April 2013 at 11:14

    Looking forward to hearing how the story unfolds.

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  19. DL Hammons1 April 2013 at 11:55

    I've always loved that name. :)

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  20. D.E. Malone1 April 2013 at 12:00

    I like her strategy of waiting for Granddad to be around to take her side. Very clever and so teen!

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  21. EvalinaMaria1 April 2013 at 12:52

    Well done! Good luck with A to Z challenge.

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  22. Debra Gray-Elliott1 April 2013 at 12:53

    Beautiful!

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  23. Wendy1 April 2013 at 16:01

    A funny thing about grandparents is that they were parents first. I wonder if Granddad would have approved of Carol (or Graham) having blue streaks. Doubtful!

    This is a great start to A to Z, Sally.

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  24. Pam Williams1 April 2013 at 18:31

    Interesting way to handle the challenge. Very nice!

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  25. Kathy Bradey1 April 2013 at 19:16

    Lovely way to begin the challenge.

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  26. Razgale2 April 2013 at 00:13

    Great start! Good luck! :)

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  27. Anne2 April 2013 at 01:33

    Easy to read, great flow, totally in the here and now of our teenagers. Great writing indeed! Good luck with the challenge!

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  28. J.L. Campbell2 April 2013 at 09:39

    This reminds me of the limericks I used to read in childhood.
    Amber clearly has some challenges, so I'll pick up where you left off with B.

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