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FRIDAY FICTIONEERS - Once a week we submit a 100 word flash fiction based on a photo prompt.
Here is this week's photo prompt courtesy of Madison Woods
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PHOTO PROMPT – ©
Madison Woods
GRANDMA’S
HOUSE
Grandma’s house was always the
same. The same smell of beeswax polish,
the same ornaments on the shelves, the same old fashioned Aga in the kitchen,
always warm, always ready with the kettle near to boiling.
The garden water butt was almost
full, the stagnant water filling the container nearly to the brim. One turn of the rusty tap the water would
gush out and flood the paving stones.
Grandpa came out of the
house and attached the hose to the tap as he easily turned the brass handle. Sarah
grabbed his hand and led him to the flower beds.
Word count: 100
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Dear Sally,
ReplyDeleteI'm guessing that Grandma's house is always the same so Grandpa, who is blind, won't fall and break his neck. Subtly and sweetly told.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I love how you lead us through this. Of course Grandma's house is always the same, and then we find out why. Lovely. (One minor comment - the 'as' in the penultimate line suggests that Grandpa does both those things simultaneously, which is probably impossible. Perhaps 'then' would work better.)
ReplyDeleteClaire
I see what you mean now, having re-read it, thank you so much for that comment.
DeleteWonderfully descriptive, could so easily imagine the scene set before us.
ReplyDeleteEveryone's grandmas's house is always the same as it ever was, that's the best thing about it :-)
ReplyDeleteLovely story!
what a wonderful scene you paint.. the last sentence really completes it.
ReplyDeletelovely <3 - Grandma's house.... Those are the best memories aren't they?
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. Well done.
ReplyDeleteok, First you made me look up aga, then I couldn't figure out why Sarah had to lead Grandpa by the hand - but Rochelle's insight that he was blind - well, okay - but I still had to reread the passage as a blind grandpa's changeover from a tap to a hose without letting the water flow out was a pretty neat trick, especially as I doubt that I could do it sighted..
ReplyDeleteThat was sweet, and very descriptive. I can almost smell the beeswax.
ReplyDeleteLovely descriptions. You built a wonderful atmosphere of comfort and security, and the final paragraph works really well to tie it all together purposefully.
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