Mondays Finish the Story – June 1st, 2015
This is a unique flash fiction
challenge where we provide you with a new photo each week, and the first
sentence of a story. Your challenge is to finish the story using
100-150 words, not including the sentence provided. Don’t
forget to use the opening sentence… This challenge runs from Monday to
Sunday! Get creative and have fun finishing the story!
Please include the photo with
your bit of flash and a link back to this post.
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| Photo Credit Barbara W. Beacham |
Finish the story begins
with: “What a tangled web we weave, when first we practice
to deceive.”
THE CLASS
“What a tangled web we weave, when first we practice to deceive.”
Susie looked at the diverse hairstyles bent over
the scratched wooden desks; eventually a few of her pupils looked up and
glanced her way. She smiled at Camilla, encouraging
the young teenager to speak.
Camilla stuttered, speaking quietly in her timid
way but always brave enough to speak first in class.
Bono raised his hand and in his gruff, breaking
voice, mumbled his thoughts, his dreadlocks shiny, his scuffed worn shoes,
dressed in clothes that needed ironing, his strong intelligent eyes shone with
unknown depths.
Susan kept an encouraging smile on her face. She looked towards the back of the room, catching
the eye of a beautiful girl, full make-up, dyed hair streaked with pink and
blue, defying all school rules, made her point in a lilting cockney Jamaican accent.
Leona’s melodic, rhythmic voice filled the
classroom as she rapped out her thoughts on her no-good, lying, cheating
boyfriend.
Word count: 149
A lovely tale. I like that you made the scene a classroom. Thank you for writing for the Mondays Finish the Story challenge Sally. Be well... ^..^
ReplyDeleteA nice turn on the image and the sentence - a classroom where the souls aren't afraid to speak.
ReplyDelete"A tangled web. . ." I've used those very words many times. I like this prompt!
I enjoyed the story with you using diversity to get the point across. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteI loved the different personalities in the classroom, and the way Susan reflects on them as each speaks.
ReplyDeleteI already like these students, and you've built their characters in less than 150 words.
ReplyDeleteA wonderful diverse collection of well drawn characters Sally~Well written :)
ReplyDeleteYour subjects are real. Very real.
ReplyDeleteWonderful story Sally... loved the characters.. so real, so distinct :)
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