Wednesday 22 May 2013

THE MISUNDERSTANDING

100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups – Week#90
Posted on May 20, 2013 by jfb57
Julie says: I’ve been having problems with a very sore wrist for a couple of months. Nothing I do seems to help and of course as I spend quite a lot of my day at a PC, rest is out of the question. Just to make sure there wasn’t something else I could do, I’ve been to see a physio and he did some acupuncture on it.
So (you’ve guessed it I’m sure) the prompt is:
…the points were sharp…
As usual just add 100 words. Please keep your pieces suitable for a PG certificate and if you are stuck do read ‘What is 100WCGU?’ for some help.
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 HERE IS MY CONTRIBUTION:

THE MISUNDERSTANDING

The words flew around the room
He said them in their bedroom
Vitriolic full of venom
This is what they had become
Where was the love, the affection?
They were sinking deep into a canyon
Jutting up the points were sharp
Biting and pricking like a barb
No rescue would be forthcoming
His blue eyes were so hard and unblinking
She’d never seen him so angry before
His last act was slamming the front door
She fell in a heap, curled up in a ball of shame
She tried to call out his name
Her throat was dry, no noise came.


Word count:  103

3 comments:

  1. Your choice of "noise" rather than "sound" in the last line is genius because it paints a different picture of her. The title suggests there might be a second chance, but the scene says otherwise.

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  2. This was brilliant. Well done!!

    Kathy
    http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com

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  3. What a sad but powerful scene. Great job, Sally.

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