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Here is my entry:
*** there is a short
description at the end of British ‘old money’ i.e. pre-dissimilation
(pre-1971). ****
ANTIQUE VASE
‘Good morning, Mrs. Davis.’
‘Morning, Mrs. Powell,’ replied
Hetty.
‘It’s a nice morning.’
‘Yes, it is. I’ll soon have these weeds out!’
Hetty sighed inwardly and turned back to her
garden in the hope her nosy neighbour would take the hint and return to her own
house. No such luck.
‘Your blue vase isn’t in the
window anymore. I could have sworn I saw
it in the shop window for 2/6d when I was in town the other day.’
Was that a slight sneer she heard
in Mrs. Powell’s voice? Straightening
up, Hetty looked her neighbour in the eye.
‘I’ve moved it, so it doesn’t fade with the sun.’
Mrs. Powell sniffed and shuffled
away towards her own front door.
Hetty fumed over the exchange for
the rest of the morning. What business
was it of that old biddy’s where her blue vase was? She swiped away a lone tear. It had been a tough decision to sell it to Falstaff
Antiques in the nearby town but she’d needed the money to pay the coal man and
the rent was due at the end of the week. Then she thought about the price old
man Falstaff had paid her and what it was in the window for. Fred wouldn’t notice it had gone. It wasn't his fault that his work had dried
up. He was walking in to town to see a
man about a job today. Hetty only hoped
he returned with good news. Back indoors
she took the bread dough, which had risen nicely, and started to knead it with
a vengeance. A nice crusty loaf with a
smattering of home-made gooseberry jam would go down a treat.
Every so often Hetty thought
about her beautiful blue vase. Every
time she went in to town she looked in the antique shop, she browsed the
shelves, brushing off the owner’s attempts to sell her some tatty old
thing. She never found her vase. As the years passed there were more things
she had to think about, grandchildren came along, Fred passed away and she had
to build her life again. The vase was
never very far from her mind, especially at night when it appeared in her dreams. Being a very stalwart and practical lady, she
didn’t believe she actually heard the words in her dreams.
Find me
Save me
Bring me home
In the cold light of morning as
she raked the ashes out from the grate and re-laid the fire ready to light in
the evening, she dismissed such stuff as nonsense. Her mind was playing tricks on her.
**************
Buy me!
Take me!
Anna heard these two phrases in
her dreams, in her every waking moment.
She couldn’t shake them out of her head.
She mentioned it to her husband
who just looked at her with disdain. ‘You’re
losing the plot,’ was his response.
She mentioned it to her best
friend who looked at her with a raised eyebrow.
‘Right, really, come on, don’t be stupid.’
She stopped mentioning the voice to
others but the voice didn’t stop. As the
weeks went by the thoughts became stronger.
The voice became louder. It
stopped being a whisper, a sibilant hiss permeating her brainwaves, it became
urgent, pleading, imploring.
Then one day the voice
stopped. Anna missed hearing those
words. She felt guilty that she had
ignored them for all these months. She
got on with her life.
Anna felt the bed shift
She felt her mind drift
Buy me
Take me
Save me
The words shouted in her mind
She desperately tried to find
She groped and searched
As the bed lurched
She gathered her energies
A tickle, a trickle, a soft breeze
Whispers of her name
Calling, again and again
Anna, Anna,
Anna
She felt their souls bonding
Their hearts blending
A joyous merging
Driving Anna forward
She quivered
With unexpected emotion
She felt her mind exhibit caution
Caught it on the wind
Intangible as it slipped
Lost like a postscript
Her life passed by in snapshots
Her family caught up in the plots
It happened in milliseconds
Images sparkling like diamonds
But yet others were as dull as dishwater
Some were as light as a feather
Passing by in a blur.
There was nobody she could talk
to, everybody laughed at her silly thoughts but she knew, deep down she knew,
she had to find this vase. It was imperative
otherwise why would she have these dreams?
On a visit to her Great-Aunt
Margaret, who sometimes went off at tangents, their conversation became a
little more interesting. Anna’s ears
pricked up.
‘Of course, mother thought we
didn’t know she’d sold the vase but we all knew. It was one of those unspoken family
secrets. Even dad knew – sort of. We were just grateful she kept us fed and
warm every day.’
Great-Aunt Margaret pointed to
her bookcase. ‘Take that photo album
down dear, for me please.’
Anna complied with her wishes and
passed the album over, surreptitiously wiping the dust off the cover with her
sleeve.
‘Pfft, a bit of dust didn’t hurt
anybody.’
Her Great-aunt was still sharp
with eagle eyes. Anna smiled.
Turning the pages, she stopped at
a photo.
There it was.
The blue vase.
The family heirloom as was.
In the back of her mind Anna
heard the plaintive cry again.
Buy me!
Save me!
Two weeks later Anna was
revisiting the quaint little market town near to where her family had lived all
those years ago. She let Ken go and sit
in the café for a coffee, he would be quite happy ensconced with his Kindle, a
cup of coffee and a slice of cake.
There it was.
Falstaff Antiques.
She knew she had to go in.
She purchased the vase.
She held it tightly to her chest,
breathed a big sigh and felt/heard a responding sigh.
The whisper came, thank you
for bringing me home.
The story of the antique vase will
live on in the family.
Word count: 999
*** Pre-decimal currency (before 1971) was calculated as follows:
- Threepence = 3d
- Sixpence = 6d
- Shilling = 1/-
- 12 pennies = 1 shilling
- 20 shillings = £1
- 240 pennies = £1
- Florin = 2/-
- Half Crown = 2/6
- Crown = 5/-
Prices would be written in pounds, shillings and pennies. For example,
an item which cost 9 shillings and 4 pennies would be marked 9/4 in the shops
(or could be written 9s 4d). The ‘s’ stood for the Latin word ‘solidus’ and the
‘d’ represented the Latin word ‘denarius’
Hi Sally - a lovely gentle story ... and I'm so glad the blue vase was safely restored to the family; so often we do things thinking others won't remember ... yet they do - like the children and their father knowing that Hetty had had to sell it. So poignant and so true for some.
ReplyDeleteFascinating way you've brought the dream in and brought Anna into the story ... wonderful writing - thank you ... Hilary
Sally, the sacrifice of a loved object for the benefit of others, what a lovely story. I'm glad the granddaughter was able to rescue the vase. Reminds me of all the vases I've purchased and still own. Now in storage, sadly. I should be sharing them with the world!
ReplyDeleteNice! I'm glad Hetty's family got the vase back - she was dong a good thing for her family!
ReplyDeleteLovely. This vase is like a fragment of memory, something that belongs with the family forever. We all have such objects, sometimes tangible like a piece of porcelain, sometimes ephemeral, like a poem or a melody. It is a symbol of belonging.
ReplyDeleteI found it a gritty story about sticking to roots. Saving a family heirloom that saved the family generations ago is a wonderful idea. Thanks. Sanhita.
ReplyDeleteI am so glad that the vase's call was heard and that it is home. This is a beautiful story and thank you.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sally for sharing this story of N heirloom. Nice touch to go from prose to poem. Have a lovely spring. Take care.
ReplyDeleteIt's always touching to hear stories of family selling off heirlooms to make ends meat. It something everyone can relate to because it's either happened at some point in their family or they fear ever having to do it. Glad it had happy ending.
ReplyDeleteThat was a great read. I'm glad all was made right and that all is well in the end. Thanks for sharing your work with us.
ReplyDeleteHi Sally. A lovely story of hope and making it through hard times. I think many today will find parallels in their lives. I loved the poem and how you furthered the story through it. I'm so glad Anna was sensitive to the voice. The personification of the vase. Let's hope it symbolizes good times in the family with hardship a thing of the past.
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking part in ANTIQUE VASE. Your stories always have heart and soul.
Hi,
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful journey. The vase is now back home where she belong. I like the way you combined rhythmic verse within the story. It increased the tension and the hope for a good outcome.
Shalom aloeichem,
Pat Garcia
This is a wonderful story! I understand why Hetty made the choice she did. As difficult as it was, keeping the family fed and cared for had to take precedence. I felt for her when the nosy neighbor got involved.
ReplyDeleteThe ending to this story was perfection. I'm glad the vase finally made it back home where it belonged.
Sally, I enjoyed the story, but I'm even more grateful for the explanation of the old money! You have no idea how often I've struggled to sort that from context in old books :D
ReplyDeleteThis is a wonderful story. I'm very glad the vase came home!
ReplyDeleteI found your story so captivating, Sally. It was sad that Hetty had to sell the vase but I'm glad it managed to find its way back into the family. The poem you incorporated into the middle of the flash was beautiful and fascinating.
ReplyDeleteIn your opening, you created a sense of England over the garden fence, Sally, small-town attitudes - and struggles. And you stirred my memories of our old money - thanks too for the footnote reminder.Having wondered if you were heading in an unexpected direction, but there it was 'a sibilant hiss' - I like that phrase. Fitting end - the vase back where it belonged. With a nymph or siren on it?
ReplyDeleteThis clever piece with the mix of elements deserved to make the short-list in a talented field of writers. Congratulations Sally. Stay safe, sensible, and inspired.
DeleteThe initial setting was so reminiscent of my grandmother's house near Liverpool. A bygone era. This was a lovely story, with the bonus of an unexpected poem in the middle!
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ReplyDeleteA fascinating narrative for WEP challenge. Capturing both the past and the present of a vase, sold and rediscovered by the family. Well done.
ReplyDeleteLove the story of the families and of the vase you've so wonderfully woven here. Well done!
ReplyDeletePoignant! Poor Hetty never did get her beloved vase back but I'm glad Anna did. I liked the way the conversation was written in a way that was relevant for the time it was set in. It's a lovely story.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you explained the currency at the end, because I wondered what "2/6d" meant. I thought it was an odd typo. LOL.
ReplyDeleteGood story. I remember some tv comedy back in the 80s that had an episode where a statue lured a woman into buying it. "Buy me. BUY ME." I don't remember the whole thing, just that it was funny. Anyway, that's what this made me think of first. So great work!
I'm of a vintage that didn't need the explanation re currency, the first money sums I did were £sd. Charming flash. Enjoyed reading.
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