It's time for this week's WWBH
The rules are:
1) Use the photo and the 5 words provided in your story
2) Keep your word count 500 words or less.
3) You have until next Tuesday to link up your post.
4) Link up with your blog hostess (Nicole, Carrie, Tena or Leanne)
5) Have fun, don’t stress, let those creative juices flow.
Here are the five words:
Butcher
Bullfight
Gossip
Result
Novel
And here’s the photo:
Another Promise
Yesterday
the butcher had given her a strange
look, her eyes hidden behind large sunglasses on a dull and dismal day, her
quiet voice requesting a single rump steak.
The plain headscarf covered her hair, snuggling neatly against her ears holding
in the plaster on her ear lobe healing the large gash. She heard her grandmother’s voice, blue steak
to bring down the bruising, then cook it and give it to the dog.
The
viciousness of this last attack was as unexpected as it was sudden, the
aftermath a storm of emotions. She knew he
would make himself scarce for a week or so, then her doorbell would ring, she
would see him through the peep-hole, contrite, head hanging down, holding a
bouquet of flowers along with a box of chocolates.
Amelia
applied her make-up carefully; her fingertips gently spread the liquid gold
over her face blending in the foundation; every now and then she paused and
studied her reflection in the mirror.
The bruises on her skin she could hide not so much the scarring inside
her mind.
She
picked up her silver backed compact, the tactile feel of the cold metal evoked
feelings she would rather keep damped down, the Art Deco design on the lid was
rather novel for these modern times but
Amelia loved the nostalgia of the times, every time she flipped catch on the
lid she could see her grandmother’s gnarled, arthritic hands struggling to open
it.
The
result would be good enough for her
work colleagues not to gossip about
her, the sideways sympathetic looks, even the malicious glances from so-called
girlfriends would be her downfall, she would need all her strength to remain
brave. The office environment ran on
nervous energy, the fear and anticipation reminiscent of a Spanish bullfight, the swirls of dust and the
animal smells, the pawing of the great beast’s hooves would overwhelm the
senses unless your shoulders were broad enough to carry the heavy burden that
weighed her down every day.
Amelia
pushed herself away from the dressing table, stood up slowly and limped from
her bedroom into the lounge. She grabbed
her coat and handbag, blew a kiss at her grandmother’s photo in the silver
backed frame. She locked the front door
behind her, took a deep breath as she set off for the bus stop. On her commute to work she promised herself
this was the last time just as she had promised herself many times before.
Word Count: 412
So sad...Really nice work, Sally!
ReplyDeleteLiked it Sally. You used the words very well. The story has a darker feel, which leaves the reader unsure which way it will turn. I wanted Amelia to slip those big scissors in her handbag on the way out, but the direction you take increases the sadness and sympathy we feel for the character.
ReplyDeleteI do hope the memory of her grandmother makes her dig deep for her own strength! Really and truly a sad, sad state of affairs, and one I've known personally. Thank God, I found my strength! A very strong piece! Well done!
ReplyDeleteI'm still working on your critique - will have it done soon!
Real life. Raw emotion.
ReplyDeleteExcellent read that made my heart ache for Amelia.
How interesting the stories this photo provoked - immediately I was drawn into this character and could have read more. Very powerful piece.
ReplyDeleteAlways a great storyteller! Whenever I look at the list of words, I'm amazed how easily you combine them - they seem impossible. I give you an A+ for the clever use of "novel" because, of course, I was expecting you to use the noun.
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