tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post8898976234936862534..comments2023-10-25T03:20:20.953-07:00Comments on Sally's Scribbles: Failure - Write Edit Publish Blog Hop May 2014Sallyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-47611503467195892652014-05-28T08:48:53.879-07:002014-05-28T08:48:53.879-07:00Wow, that was so powerful it brought tears to my e...Wow, that was so powerful it brought tears to my eyes. kjmckendryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07534751311630921447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-70812637014550461522014-05-26T08:01:37.270-07:002014-05-26T08:01:37.270-07:00Powerful story... It surely grabbed my attention. ...Powerful story... It surely grabbed my attention. Good jibGrammy Staffyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02574485995391510872noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-73716164739122192782014-05-25T16:10:31.005-07:002014-05-25T16:10:31.005-07:00Sally, this is powerful and real. I liked workin...Sally, this is powerful and real. I liked working out the relationship before it was revealed. Needs some work, re point of view but a very good insight into the problem. I think all mothers wonder if they got it right whether or not their kids are sociopaths.Raelene Purtillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09316816228739648286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-70902416341094250272014-05-25T09:41:06.675-07:002014-05-25T09:41:06.675-07:00As a mother I can understand the mother in this fa...As a mother I can understand the mother in this family. Always trying to make things turn out different, but unable to realize she is a part of the problem, not the problem itself. Great take on the DV issue, one not usually seen.Lisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06658507579160418855noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-33740034759420330862014-05-25T01:22:49.050-07:002014-05-25T01:22:49.050-07:00This is a different take on the usual domestic vio...This is a different take on the usual domestic violence theme - it sure would be different for a woman if it was her son doing the violence rather than a husband or whatever.Trishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-62341528943710371242014-05-25T01:18:05.253-07:002014-05-25T01:18:05.253-07:00Aah I wish she does get the courage to press charg...Aah I wish she does get the courage to press charges!Midnight scribbleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08202750447005185096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-33410013735303962752014-05-24T19:51:01.601-07:002014-05-24T19:51:01.601-07:00Heavy stuff. Very well written.Heavy stuff. Very well written.The Armchair Squidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10739833215220853127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-81243663725181396072014-05-24T19:31:24.284-07:002014-05-24T19:31:24.284-07:00Well written Sally. You captured the pain, both em...Well written Sally. You captured the pain, both emotional and physical, and the delima extremely well. Such a tragedy.dolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-52456793131438825822014-05-24T12:05:23.898-07:002014-05-24T12:05:23.898-07:00Very well written Sally. The description and image...Very well written Sally. The description and imagery of Nina and her pains, both inside and out, were very effective and I could feel the frustration of her daughter and the policewoman. I am hoping she has the strength to do what she needs to, and get her son the help he needs, but somehow I wonder if she'll keep on forgiving him and taking the blame on herself.Heather Muskhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06401981352369837021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-13509839092073448212014-05-23T10:09:42.597-07:002014-05-23T10:09:42.597-07:00Your story kept me until the end and finding out i...Your story kept me until the end and finding out it is her son beating her up explained even more her reluctance to press charges. Every mother remembers the cherished baby and child such a son WAS , and a mother's heart often does not do the right thing for that very reason. Sad, tragic, now, will there be more of this story ?KathyB.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13076933273610590290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-45448402662495035092014-05-22T09:34:17.114-07:002014-05-22T09:34:17.114-07:00This is an interesting, well told story. I think y...This is an interesting, well told story. I think you should let the reader know a little earlier in the story that it is a mother-son relationship. Also, when you switch to the officer's POV, put a break before that paragraph. It just helps keeps readers on track. I hope you expand this story and go a little deeper. We want to understand more.Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-10627026868229411302014-05-22T07:30:53.404-07:002014-05-22T07:30:53.404-07:00Well written..
True story of some households..
Unf...Well written..<br />True story of some households..<br />Unfortunately we can't stop it.<br />Imbeciles as such just keep increasing in number..Lancelot Quadrashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04831605809343081325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-69290300619518969472014-05-22T02:01:52.445-07:002014-05-22T02:01:52.445-07:00Thursday 22 May 2014
Dear Sally,
You are first co...Thursday 22 May 2014<br /><br />Dear Sally,<br />You are first commenter on my post!!<br />Oh my! This story fits the prompt perfectly. Battered women feel like failures even though they are not at fault. Great description of the damages, the bruises and the emotional conflicts between the characters. Interesting that in this story it is about a son who beats his mother, which is an even more difficult situaution that a husband beating his wife. It is easier to understand why she does not want to press charges.<br />Great story!<br />Thanks for reading my non-fiction text. I am so glad that what happened to me was a pure accident and not an assault. <br />I am feeling much better, by the way.<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br />ox<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-84237995497556973262014-05-21T21:53:03.077-07:002014-05-21T21:53:03.077-07:00A difficult subject tackled well. I hope she find...A difficult subject tackled well. I hope she finds the courage to press charges. Otherwise the cycle continues. Sad and harrowing.Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-71463972844288073832014-05-21T18:51:13.300-07:002014-05-21T18:51:13.300-07:00Hi Sally
Drugs alter the mind and can make a good ...Hi Sally<br />Drugs alter the mind and can make a good kid into a monster. Well done. <br /><br />On a personal note, I know a family that puts up with an abusive and violent son who won't get a job or help even though he is nearly 30. Once he tried to push his mother down the stairs. If he were my son, I'd have kicked him out long ago.<br />NancyN. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-14694967915482696472014-05-21T15:30:48.303-07:002014-05-21T15:30:48.303-07:00Sally, this was so powerful I could feel her pain,...Sally, this was so powerful I could feel her pain, both physical and emotional. How sad, yet all too common. <br /><br />Thanks for sharing it with WEP Sally.<br /><br />Denise Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-45933357542059412552014-05-21T15:27:44.149-07:002014-05-21T15:27:44.149-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-83700551763655640822014-05-21T08:42:18.264-07:002014-05-21T08:42:18.264-07:00The sad thing is, this happens every day in some h...The sad thing is, this happens every day in some household. There is no excuse. Ever. This hits home, in a gut wrenching way. Too many women and kids suffer brutality. A touchy subject that you handled well.D.G. Hudsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06213237734772028645noreply@blogger.com