tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post4773234351464537167..comments2023-10-25T03:20:20.953-07:00Comments on Sally's Scribbles: SELFISH WORDSSallyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-62758919200710273612012-07-03T11:23:46.138-07:002012-07-03T11:23:46.138-07:00Sally, I like this very much. Your female in this ...Sally, I like this very much. Your female in this poem was 'stuck in the middle' in so many ways. Made wrong choices, but there's a hopeful note at the end.J.L. Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05666634455836834179noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-32989583542608105892012-07-02T12:20:04.464-07:002012-07-02T12:20:04.464-07:00Hi Sally,
'Indeed true to many lives. Effecti...Hi Sally,<br /><br />'Indeed true to many lives. Effective use of the prompt. Your tone and presentation tone suits the subject matter. I think many people would relate or know someone who has experienced this.Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-3908828677713789382012-07-02T10:02:55.980-07:002012-07-02T10:02:55.980-07:00Hello.
I agree with the others. This is bitterswee...Hello.<br />I agree with the others. This is bittersweet and yes, an all too painful reality for some. Nicely expressed.<br />Thanks for sharing.<br /><br /><a href="http://thoughtsofbeautyinthestillnessofdawn.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Thoughts Of Beauty In The Stillness Of Dawn...</a>The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-54614320099242732172012-07-02T08:10:55.622-07:002012-07-02T08:10:55.622-07:00Wow! That was painful. I'm off to hug my daugh...Wow! That was painful. I'm off to hug my daughters right now!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-23071453329189443132012-07-01T08:44:27.393-07:002012-07-01T08:44:27.393-07:00This is the tragic story of so many teens --well t...This is the tragic story of so many teens --well told and realistic. This is a truly "stuck in the middle" situation that so many of us experience.Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-54742137239412437292012-07-01T03:51:18.733-07:002012-07-01T03:51:18.733-07:00I agree with Donna. This is moving and unfortunate...I agree with Donna. This is moving and unfortunately realistic. The characters have a life of their own. Well done and welcome to RFW, Sally.Kiru Tayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-52951001300179478952012-06-30T22:46:39.224-07:002012-06-30T22:46:39.224-07:00Sally, you're breaking my social worker heart ...Sally, you're breaking my social worker heart with this theme. So tragic; but so typical. This was a beautifully written, emotive excerpt. I'm nearly speechless at how well developed your characters and story line is.<br /><br />Thank you for participating in this weeks RFW challenge Sally.<br /><br />......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-3193410902154894022012-06-30T22:42:56.103-07:002012-06-30T22:42:56.103-07:00bittersweet indeed!... getting stronger and moving...bittersweet indeed!... getting stronger and moving on with life!....thank you for sharing this to us :)<br /><br />_Genskie_Genskiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08717584206268238656noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-58690123094821566852012-06-29T16:15:51.599-07:002012-06-29T16:15:51.599-07:00Sally, this is brilliant. So jam packed with emoti...Sally, this is brilliant. So jam packed with emotion. I love how we can't hate the dad - 'he had tears in his eyes'. Also love how the mother's pain is implicit, rather than explicit, and the 'other woman' is not given prominence. I feel this young girl's pain and the outcome seemed predictable.<br /><br />You, unlike me, have adhered to the guidelines well and with great power. Thanks for posting this great entry for us to read and enjoy. I'm off to tweet it now.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-48768158320097335572012-06-29T05:08:42.850-07:002012-06-29T05:08:42.850-07:00Quite bittersweet, the opening stanza is my favour...Quite bittersweet, the opening stanza is my favourite.Charmaine Clancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18059559142070140041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-70487557326551586552012-06-29T03:35:33.712-07:002012-06-29T03:35:33.712-07:00Hi,
Very touching prose. It so perfectly encapsul...Hi,<br /><br />Very touching prose. It so perfectly encapsulates sense of separation and the devastating effect family break-ups have on that of teenagers. Wonderful piece.<br /><br />best<br />F<br /><br />http://francinehowarth.blogspot.comFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-18687171821583847782012-06-28T18:34:11.460-07:002012-06-28T18:34:11.460-07:00Sometimes when the life that springs from you look...Sometimes when the life that springs from you looks you trustingly in the eyes, you just know you have to be a hero for your child. Your life is over. OUR life has just begun. Great poem, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-23508812778740750952012-06-28T13:38:11.002-07:002012-06-28T13:38:11.002-07:00So painfully described and yet so true to many liv...So painfully described and yet so true to many livesHeather Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11847855601653718033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-5204511691671945962012-06-28T07:20:17.549-07:002012-06-28T07:20:17.549-07:00Also, I think it spreads the message that there is...Also, I think it spreads the message that there is hope and a ray of light at the end of the tunnel.. and every one knows that the only way out is through! I love this!C.S.Hhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06931727241982253089noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-6237152903471110982012-06-28T07:17:56.263-07:002012-06-28T07:17:56.263-07:00I love how this poem told a story! It was brillian...I love how this poem told a story! It was brilliant! A father walks out on his daughter and she's left to pick up the pieces.. she's forced to grow up with this heaviness weighing her down and she stops caring.. turns gothic (nice touch by the way as many teens can relate to that including me)and as a result of her carelessness, her whole world is changed by the birth of her son,(another nice touch)and then she regains her perspective on life.. EXCELLENT!!C.S.Hhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06931727241982253089noreply@blogger.com