tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post2878419536792413033..comments2023-10-25T03:20:20.953-07:00Comments on Sally's Scribbles: W E P - MASK Sallyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-30193712552194023282014-02-23T12:53:22.907-08:002014-02-23T12:53:22.907-08:00I like the plot development. Does George discover ...I like the plot development. Does George discover the identity of the young lady? I'm curious. <br />Will you be continuing with the story?Michelle Wallacehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02750092836481599870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-91196599363463720382014-02-16T11:44:33.689-08:002014-02-16T11:44:33.689-08:00The reveal is very enjoyable, I felt sure George w...The reveal is very enjoyable, I felt sure George was a hitman then turns out he might be the grandfather. You've captured the cafe scene very well, and the suspenseful ending is perfect. Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-20052931414115194492014-02-15T08:33:44.841-08:002014-02-15T08:33:44.841-08:00Oh very nice, I like bittersweet stories, and I ho...Oh very nice, I like bittersweet stories, and I hope they get to meet. I know of a couple who searched for their daughter, whom they had given up for adoption. It's hard when families are split and connections get frayed. Well done. D.G. Hudsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06213237734772028645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-70106596033043844992014-02-15T03:30:42.518-08:002014-02-15T03:30:42.518-08:00Sally, I love this ~ the mystery, the friendliness...Sally, I love this ~ the mystery, the friendliness of the cafe scene with which I am very familiar , the tactile feel with the coffee, the pastries, the cafeatmosphere. I was waiting to see if the mystery was solved. I'm glad you kept us guessing.<br /><br />I'm glad you're back! I hope things have settled down after a sad time.<br /><br />Thanks for posting for WEP .<br /><br />Denise Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-32114079015192786432014-02-15T03:07:56.263-08:002014-02-15T03:07:56.263-08:00February 15th, 2014
Dear Sally,
Thank you so muc...February 15th, 2014<br /><br />Dear Sally,<br /><br />Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my story for 'What's in a face', about Marcy and Julie.<br /><br />You have written a delightful tale of suspense about longing and friendship! <br /><br />You keep the reader wondering what George's intention are. At first he seems sinister. Could he be a private detective? Or a hit man? But slowly you reveal his fine qualities: He is just patiently looking for his long lost granddaughter. And the character of the waitress Lucy is wonderful. What a thoughtful, kind and generous person she is. <br /><br />And you have not let anything go to waste. Lucy uses her sons to solve the mystery! <br /><br />The photo at the end shows us why George had difficulty matching the photo with the girl. It leaves the ending with some doubt. But the idea is that Lucy's sons can get the girl to reveal her true identity. We all hope and imagine this in our minds. Great flash fiction!<br /><br />If you were to work this into a larger work, you would naturally reveal a little more, because the characters would continue the story somehow.<br /><br />You're such a clever story-teller, Sally!<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-89706469242467264472014-02-14T11:13:06.544-08:002014-02-14T11:13:06.544-08:00What a lovely story ~ I was dying to know if inde...What a lovely story ~ I was dying to know if indeed she is the grand daughter ~ Some mystery in here too ~ Thanks for sharing ~Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.com