tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post2020574923759996004..comments2023-10-25T03:20:20.953-07:00Comments on Sally's Scribbles: FORTY YEARS AGOSallyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-34621806102932857462012-09-11T06:25:00.448-07:002012-09-11T06:25:00.448-07:00Hi, Sally,
Having ridden the rails for many years...Hi, Sally,<br /><br />Having ridden the rails for many years, I so this picture so clearly. Lovely details and an terrific build up to an un-kissed kiss. Nicely done.Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-41899610938799616712012-09-10T18:24:41.978-07:002012-09-10T18:24:41.978-07:00Love this! Waiting for that kiss to come had me ge...Love this! Waiting for that kiss to come had me getting a bit excited as well.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12146136846875431598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-12469912504165246232012-09-10T08:10:37.319-07:002012-09-10T08:10:37.319-07:00God, younger sibling have bad timing. Love the way...God, younger sibling have bad timing. Love the way this one flowed. It just read like real life :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14831956192459960019noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-58773290560923046032012-09-09T17:35:17.336-07:002012-09-09T17:35:17.336-07:00Awesome voice and perspective. Loved the characte...Awesome voice and perspective. Loved the character descriptions, and the intimacy of the viewpoint. A pleasant memory altogether.<br /><br />......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-36813114078274633602012-09-09T14:21:35.854-07:002012-09-09T14:21:35.854-07:00oh the memories of thwarted love! Well done!oh the memories of thwarted love! Well done!Kerrinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06808737330801680632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-83774292651742957592012-09-08T23:46:15.182-07:002012-09-08T23:46:15.182-07:00Very natural...loved the rhythms of the train ride...Very natural...loved the rhythms of the train ride, the hints of autumn, the kiss that didn't happen...universally appealing story well told Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-4461290767454351612012-09-08T23:12:15.309-07:002012-09-08T23:12:15.309-07:00Lovely story, Sally! This gives a warm fuzzy feeli...Lovely story, Sally! This gives a warm fuzzy feeling of a love lost but regained in memory. I think a lot of girls have had such an experience and it certainly resonates with me. <br /><br />Thanks for your kinds words on my post.Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15640511681168230116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-41051105877208128332012-09-08T22:21:01.147-07:002012-09-08T22:21:01.147-07:00I love that name.. "Colin." Sounds sophi...I love that name.. "Colin." Sounds sophisticated, charming and makes me want to kiss him!!! LOL! Great Job Sally! I enjoyed reading it! Thank you for sharing! C.S.Hhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06931727241982253089noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-87777985233459824092012-09-08T16:14:58.528-07:002012-09-08T16:14:58.528-07:00Ah, Sally, a bygone era. Young ladies, young men, ...Ah, Sally, a bygone era. Young ladies, young men, all so covert. Loved the sensory details in your prose - 'rumble of train wheels', 'musty smell...' Those little details draw the reader into the picture you've painted. And the regret of that lost kiss - you've nailed the prompt! <br /><br />Thank you!<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-63196623378150850322012-09-08T12:23:44.438-07:002012-09-08T12:23:44.438-07:00Hi,
Wonderfully descriptive embodying all the raw...Hi,<br /><br />Wonderfully descriptive embodying all the raw emotions of teenage desires, hopes and fears! A classic What-if? Delightful read... ;)<br /><br />best<br />F Francine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-60624357372330068632012-09-08T11:20:33.606-07:002012-09-08T11:20:33.606-07:00Hi Sally. This took me back to being a teenager an...Hi Sally. This took me back to being a teenager and anticipating the first kiss. I agree this is a great piece for a magazine.Kiru Tayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-28582522754556804912012-09-08T06:01:54.196-07:002012-09-08T06:01:54.196-07:00I loved this build up to the almost kiss: took a d...I loved this build up to the almost kiss: took a deep inward breath and waited for the kiss I was sure was coming.<br />I like how the younger brother intercepts it and the wistful reflection on how things might have turned out differently.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-39972818394657494412012-09-07T20:50:43.649-07:002012-09-07T20:50:43.649-07:00Yes, I too can relate. You did a beautiful job of ...Yes, I too can relate. You did a beautiful job of describing everything from the train ride to the shyness and excitement of Janet.<br /><br />"The leaves were turning colour and falling on the path rustling under our feet as we walked." <br /><br />These are the details that make your story so wonderful. Thank you for sharing. Yolanda Renéehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09085436784133103221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-56135160296322950092012-09-07T18:41:30.553-07:002012-09-07T18:41:30.553-07:00Very sweet story :)Very sweet story :)Charmaine Clancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18059559142070140041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-46279049109775712412012-09-07T15:30:50.653-07:002012-09-07T15:30:50.653-07:00Hi Sally,
I admire your storytelling. I like the ...Hi Sally,<br /><br />I admire your storytelling. I like the natural and realistic finish to the story. You have such freedom with words and thoughts and it shows. This could be submitted to a magazine as a short story or 'real life' piece. Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-69929218877285245372012-09-07T14:51:18.811-07:002012-09-07T14:51:18.811-07:00Hi Sally
I love your voice. Though I've never ...Hi Sally<br />I love your voice. Though I've never ridden a train to school, your story brought back my own awkward moments which helped me relate to your characters. This is a good beginning and I think if you wanted, could be developed into a longer story.<br />NancyN. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-52145521043888498142012-09-07T12:27:41.123-07:002012-09-07T12:27:41.123-07:00Leave it to a sibling to ruin everything! My sist...Leave it to a sibling to ruin everything! My sister did that to me a time or two. This is excellent!Heather Murphyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11847855601653718033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-56281983882318549832012-09-07T03:49:09.161-07:002012-09-07T03:49:09.161-07:00Wonderful story, Sally! And so true to real life. ...Wonderful story, Sally! And so true to real life. With memories we can always play 'what if?'<br />Thanks for your kind words about my post. <br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br /><a href="http://annas-adornments.blogspot.se/2012/09/i-should-have-kissed-you-rfw-challenge.html" rel="nofollow">RFW - I should have kissed you</a><br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-71145418587304644772012-09-06T19:14:26.346-07:002012-09-06T19:14:26.346-07:00Really enjoyed this. I had one of those moments......Really enjoyed this. I had one of those moments... :)Danahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16272293468239097754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-84433451047875635152012-09-06T10:21:12.025-07:002012-09-06T10:21:12.025-07:00It makes me want to ride that train.It makes me want to ride that train.Denahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16234703527174441582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-596586419077019479.post-6860936684291937102012-09-06T10:08:06.984-07:002012-09-06T10:08:06.984-07:00Beautifully written Sally. Doesn't every girl ...Beautifully written Sally. Doesn't every girl have one of those moments in real life? I think that's why this resonated with me so much. Loved it!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10204165708189660644noreply@blogger.com